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Oh! Right. I will think something up. At work at the moment. Will have a new one up tonight.

Shivers III: The [SITTING] OF THE [BULL]

Story concept. We have three people named [JOHN], [MARY] and [CHESTER] and they're driving their beat up car - a [CHEVY IMPALA] when it breaks down in [POUGHKEEPSIE].

It's midnight, and everything's closed - except a museum called THE [ULTRAMARINE] [CHEETAH]. They go inside, and discover it's very quiet. No one is there.

They realize no one is even in the town.

Everything's closed - because no one is there.

Just then, the door slam shut trapping them inside the museum...

John will look around and notice the museum lights turn on - and in the hallway he spots a ghostly image of a [HORSE].

When he points it out, strangely - Mary doesn't see the same thing. Instead the ghostly image she sees is a [BROWN] [POTATO].

When Chester looks, he sees his father - a man named [ALOYSIUS] [SMITH].

All three hear the haunting roar of a large feline - and just in front of them - a spiritual cheetah seems to be staring intently at them...

Continued...

We learn that the [COLOR] horse that John sees once belonged to [TYPE OF FAMILY MEMBER]. And John recalls how they'd tried to train this horse - but this horse was gravely wounded and John had to be the one to put it down by using a [WEAPON FROM CLUE]. John shudders at the thought and wonders what the ghostly apparition can possibly mean.

Meanwhile, Chester sees his father, Aloysius Smith - an abusive father, who would beat Chester with a [OBJECT] whenever Chester [PAST TENSE VERB]. Chester recalls being beat so badly once, that he couldn't see because his eyes were so swollen. He recalled falling into the kitchen and slipping on his own blood and landing against the kitchen counter and finding a [WEAPON FROM CLUE] which he used to fight back - and in the process had actually killed his father. He was sent to a psychiatric ward called The [COLOR] [OBJECT], where he suffered further abuse - such as electroshock therapy.

For Mary, the brown potato represented the life she'd fled from. She grew up extremely poor, and she and her family, were essentially in servitude to another family known as [FAMOUS SOUNDING LAST NAME], where she found herself victimized by the father of the house, repeatedly. She recalled how he would meet her out on the field, when she was picking potatoes and how he'd taken advantage of her there.

Each of them were reliving a horrible nightmare.

But this was just the beginning...

My story gets very, very, very dark....

[COLOR]
[TYPE OF FAMILY MEMBER] (Such as mother, father, brother, sister, cousin, etc)
[WEAPON FROM CLUE]
[OBJECT]
[PAST TENSE VERB]
[WEAPON FROM CLUE]
[COLOR]
[OBJECT]
[FAMOUS SOUNDING LAST NAME]

[COLOR]
[TYPE OF FAMILY MEMBER] (Such as mother, father, brother, sister, cousin, etc)
[WEAPON FROM CLUE] - PISTOL
[OBJECT]
[PAST TENSE VERB]
[WEAPON FROM CLUE] - LEAD PIPE
[COLOR]
[OBJECT]
[FAMOUS SOUNDING LAST NAME]

[COLOR] - BLACK (since this will apparently be very, very dark)
[TYPE OF FAMILY MEMBER] (Such as mother, father, brother, sister, cousin, etc)
[WEAPON FROM CLUE] - PISTOL
[OBJECT]
[PAST TENSE VERB]
[WEAPON FROM CLUE] - LEAD PIPE
[COLOR]
[OBJECT]
[FAMOUS SOUNDING LAST NAME] - MOZART

[COLOR] - BLACK (since this will apparently be very, very dark)
[TYPE OF FAMILY MEMBER] (Such as mother, father, brother, sister, cousin, etc) - GRANDMA
[WEAPON FROM CLUE] - PISTOL
[OBJECT]
[PAST TENSE VERB] - WALKED
[WEAPON FROM CLUE] - LEAD PIPE
[COLOR]
[OBJECT]
[FAMOUS SOUNDING LAST NAME] - MOZART

[COLOR] - BLACK (since this will apparently be very, very dark)
[TYPE OF FAMILY MEMBER] (Such as mother, father, brother, sister, cousin, etc) - GRANDMA
[WEAPON FROM CLUE] - PISTOL
[OBJECT] - SPATULA
[PAST TENSE VERB] - WALKED
[WEAPON FROM CLUE] - LEAD PIPE
[COLOR]
[OBJECT] - EGG WHISK
[FAMOUS SOUNDING LAST NAME] - MOZART

[COLOR] - BLACK (since this will apparently be very, very dark)
[TYPE OF FAMILY MEMBER] (Such as mother, father, brother, sister, cousin, etc) - GRANDMA
[WEAPON FROM CLUE] - PISTOL
[OBJECT] - SPATULA
[PAST TENSE VERB] - WALKED
[WEAPON FROM CLUE] - LEAD PIPE
[COLOR] - GREEN (which NBS is not)
[OBJECT] - EGG WHISK
[FAMOUS SOUNDING LAST NAME] - MOZART

And that's it!

Shivers III: The [SITTING] OF THE [BULL]

Story concept. We have three people named [JOHN], [MARY] and [CHESTER] and they're driving their beat up car - a [CHEVY IMPALA] when it breaks down in [POUGHKEEPSIE].

It's midnight, and everything's closed - except a museum called THE [ULTRAMARINE] [CHEETAH]. They go inside, and discover it's very quiet. No one is there.

They realize no one is even in the town.

Everything's closed - because no one is there.

Just then, the door slam shut trapping them inside the museum...

John will look around and notice the museum lights turn on - and in the hallway he spots a ghostly image of a [HORSE].

When he points it out, strangely - Mary doesn't see the same thing. Instead the ghostly image she sees is a [BROWN] [POTATO].

When Chester looks, he sees his father - a man named [ALOYSIUS] [SMITH].

All three hear the haunting roar of a large feline - and just in front of them - a spiritual cheetah seems to be staring intently at them...

We learn that the [BLACK] horse that John sees once belonged to [GRANDMA]. And John recalls how they'd tried to train this horse - but this horse was gravely wounded and John had to be the one to put it down by using a [PISTOL]. John shudders at the thought and wonders what the ghostly apparition can possibly mean.

Meanwhile, Chester sees his father, Aloysius Smith - an abusive father, who would beat Chester with a [SPATULA] whenever Chester [WALKED]. Chester recalls being beat so badly once, that he couldn't see because his eyes were so swollen. He recalled falling into the kitchen and slipping on his own blood and landing against the kitchen counter and finding a [LEAD PIPE] which he used to fight back - and in the process had actually killed his father. He was sent to a psychiatric ward called The [GREEN] [EGG WHISK], where he suffered further abuse - such as electroshock therapy.

For Mary, the brown potato represented the life she'd fled from. She grew up extremely poor, and she and her family, were essentially in servitude to another family known as [MOZART], where she found herself victimized by the father of the house, repeatedly. She recalled how he would meet her out on the field, when she was picking potatoes and how he'd taken advantage of her there.

Each of them were reliving a horrible nightmare.

But this was just the beginning...

That is a horrible nightmare. I can't imagine the famous Mozart victimising anyone; if anything, he was victimised himself (though not by his father, at least not physically. Mentally, perhaps). The elder Mozart pushed the younger one hard, but he was also very proud of his son's abilities. (Not so proud of his son's family life, though that's another story).

Anyway. NBS, it's your turn ...

Rath Darkblade wrote: ↑Mon Jun 13, 2022 6:08 pm That is a horrible nightmare. I can't imagine the famous Mozart victimising anyone; if anything, he was victimised himself (though not by his father, at least not physically. Mentally, perhaps). The elder Mozart pushed the younger one hard, but he was also very proud of his son's abilities. (Not so proud of his son's family life, though that's another story).

Yeah I am using the word you guys offers as parts of the story's evolving door.

ADVERB
ADJECTIVE
ADJECTIVE
ONOMATOPOEIA
NOUN
ADVERB
ADJECTIVE
ADJECTIVE
ADJECTIVE
HEROIC NAME

ADVERB - GINGERLY
ADJECTIVE
ADJECTIVE
ONOMATOPOEIA
NOUN
ADVERB
ADJECTIVE
ADJECTIVE
ADJECTIVE
HEROIC NAME - KRISTOPHER OLIVIA

Who's Kristopher Olivia? I'm not sure that's a very heroic name. I'd have picked something like "Rex Fortune, Adventure Seeker". Or "Larry Laffer". Or the paladin-whose-fearlessness-makes-everyone-else-rally-around-him ... you guessed it, Pally McRally.

The only Chris Olivia I've been able to find is this guy (from IMDB). Is that the one you mean, Tawm?

ADVERB - GINGERLY
ADJECTIVE
ADJECTIVE
ONOMATOPOEIA - SHOWER
NOUN - GINGER
ADVERB
ADJECTIVE
ADJECTIVE
ADJECTIVE
HEROIC NAME - KRISTOPHER OLIVIA

(You don't think a shower is onomatopoeic? Observe! First you get the water gushing down, which is where you get the "Shhhhhhhhh" sound. Then you add hot water, which is where you get the "Owww!" sound. SH-OW-er! See?)